My 1st Novelette in a Series of Novelettes...
Blurb: Charm and his twin brother Charisma were raised by their adoptive father to be spies and assassins. When they are given their first mission the world and it’s secrets open up. Charm battles doing his duties and fulfilling his own goals and dreams. Breaking the mold, follow a flamboyant, witty gay protagonist as he discovers the secrets of his past, the world, and the magic as he carves his path to his destiny.
Any feedback is appropriated. Criticism on story, characters, plot, and themes. Grammar, usage, & spelling errors. Plot holes. Even how you felt about something is good.
Available to critique swap.
Two Hours to Live is about a movie producer, Jay O’Connor, who is living on borrowed time.
He has been injected with a deadly virus and has two hours to find the cure.
His fate depends on how well you are able to predict the outcome, answer pop quizzes, unscramble words and complete word searches.
Even though Two Hours to Live is an interactive story it is a book at its heart.
You get full access to the entire app to enjoy. The beta is set to close on July 1st.
I’m looking for your overall opinion on the story as a whole.
- How would you rate the story?
- Is there a good balance between the questions and the word games?
- Do the mini games break up the continuity of the story?
- Would you pay $2.99 for this interactive book?
If not, how much would you pay?
Please visit https://www.jlburtonllc.com/two-hours-to-live-beta.html to sign up for the beta.
You can also respond to this post with your email address to receive the link.
The beta program uses TestFlight for iPhones and iPads.
At the end of every grand era of progress is an epoch of misery. Then, only those who yearn for the past can construct an even grander future.
143 years ago, the planet-colony of Yliastor received an urgent request to send its ships back to Earth. While doing so, an unknown weapon came from their Portal to the Solar System and destroyed Yliastor’s capital. As something else approached, they had no options but to seal the Portal, blocking any hopes of going back home.
Now, a workaholic engineer dreaming of restoring galactic flight stumbles upon a dangerous truth about the order governing the planet, while a lost young woman suffering from the Saint’s Curse goes after the clues of her dead father after her own life falls in shambles. Their paths intertwine in a road that neither realizes is much bigger than time itself.
Excerpt:
The first four chapters can be found here:
I chose to include the first four chapters because the first two introduce the trilogy, while the last two begin the main story of the book, so that you can get a feel of what to expect if you decide to read it :)
Content warnings:
There are violent and somewhat gruesome battles, so I guess there's that. I also don't have any explicit content. Whatever sex there is in my book is merely implied.
Feedback I'm looking for and more general stuff:
This is the first book in an already planned trilogy, called "As Only Saints Have Heard". I tried to make this story as self-contained as possible -- that is, if you read this manuscript you'll get a finished story, and if you want more, there's the two remaining books in the trilogy.
This is a quite thorough second draft, as it's beginning to go through the first round of betareaders. I'm mainly interested in getting these questions answered:
- Is the prose too dry or not captivating?
- Is the pacing too slow?
- Are the characters bland in any way? Do they feel more like actual people than plot devices?
- How are the action scenes? Are they too confusing? Are they suspenseful?
- Do you like the magic system? Do you think it is interesting, being invested enough to want to know more about it?
- Do character decisions come out as sound and sane?
- Do you understand the chain of events that lead to the main points in the book? This is basically a form of asking if my story makes sense.
- Also, is the blurb any good?
- Last
Hey all, I've been plugging my way through a lot of books recently and was taken by Dennis E Taylor's Bobiverse and Singularity Trap, followed by the Ringworld series by Niven.
Does anyone have other good books(audiobooks of at all possible,i do most of my reading while commuting) that fit those in terms of feelings of adventure and "everyman in a fantastic situation" and not being "Space Marine Gun Man Kill Alien Save Day"?
Other favorites of mine include Armor by John Steakley, various Warhammer novels,
All suggestions welcome, but I prefer the harder side of Scifi(though concessions being made for ftl and such is fine). I just like to avoid outright magic or magic unexplainable technology
Its about a girl rumored to have slept with a math teacher and then got the teacher fired (She never actually did). The story starts off with her in the bathroom of prom wearing a frilly pink dress. Then there's another girl who's really popular who i think catches a girl giving head to her boyfriend in a limo. Then those two girls have sort of an adventure and somehow end up at a party at a hotel. At the hotel a guy makes the popular girl sing a song ( I have no idea why, i think its because she owes it to him or something). Then the unpopular girl has a better opinion about the popular girl. She thinks that if the popular girl has to do something she'll give it her all. And then they end up in a warehouse of some sort.
That's all I remember really. I think there might be a third girl but i don't really remember her. It's quite a trashy young adult book but it's been getting on my nerves and I really want to read it again. I would love any help with this.
Thank you!
I'm looking for modern science fiction adventure books, anything published after around 2005 or so. Primarily looking for a story thats really based around the environments and adventure itself, something less orientated towards commentary on heavy questions like "what if robots had feelings." Nothing against those stories I've just read enough of them.
Preferably not hard science fiction
Like the title says, on each page there's a different artist rendition of a different dragon. Each complete with a two to three paragraph description of the dragon, what it can do, its habitat, what it eats. As well as a size comparison. Sometimes with humans, sometimes with whales, planets, etc. Some notable ones I can remember are:
1.) A bright green dragon with no eyes, whose head ends in a giant, twisted, fleshy horn. The rest of its body was shaped somewhat like a humming bird. It used sound to navigate, as well as attack. The picture of it included it sending a sound wave from its horn, to destroy a mountain. So the size comparison was roughly the size of a mountain. Can't remember its name.
2.) An absolutely massive lad, grey and deep purple in color, who looked a lot like Ridley from the Metroid series. His picture was just him with nothing to really compare him to. You'd assume it was a normal sized dragon, until you notice his size comparison, which is with our moon. Unfortunately that's all I remember about him
3.) A water serpent type dragon. He was dark blue, and had whiskers.
For a long time I had thought I'd found this at a scholastic book fair, but I looked through a large amount of things previously sold at the book fair, and this book was nowhere to be found. Any google search for the title or description leads me to books that look nothing like what I remembered. Any of this sound familiar?
(edit) The book was fashioned in a landscape orientation. As in, longways. I'm 100% certain this book wasn't related to the How To Train Your Dragon franchise in any way.
Hello, I'm currently in the midst of moving and need to lighten up my library and save some money so I'm selling a few sets. Shipping and fees are included in the base price, and items will be shipped using USPS Media Mail. Due to my work schedule I'm only able to make it to the post office on the weekends. If I'm unable to ship your order during, you will likely have to wait until the next weekend. If this is an issue I completely understand but please bear it in mind if you wish to purchase any of the items listed.
Just so there's no confusion:
I'm not interested in splitting sets at the moment, sorry.
Prices are firm.
Unfortunately I'm unable to ship internationally at this time.
Vagabond Vizbig Ed. 1-12 - $160 Sold
Dragon Ball Vizbig Ed. 1-5 - $75 (Pending sale)
Pokemon Adventures Box Sets, Vol. 1-7, Gold & Silver (Vol. 8-14), FireRed & LeafGreen (Vol. 23-29) - $130 (Vol 1-7 is missing its bonus poster, but the other two have theirs included)
Persona 3: Official Design Works - $100
Persona 4: Official Design Works - $100
The Art of Persona 5 - $100
In high school I used to be pretty good at balancing chemical equations (links in subsequent post), but less than ten years later I found that I'd lost the ability (and that discovery was a good while back).
Anyway, I'd like suggestions for a book on how chemistry works at a molecular level (I checked the Wikipedia article "Chemistry", and I don't see much promising in the "Further reading" section). I recall that the number of electrons an atom has affects what it can bond with, but not exactly how. An explanation of how to perform chemical equations would be a bonus. I'm also interested in the weak and strong nuclear forces and how and why they work, and in quarks and other subatomic particles. Do any books in the "Further reading" section of the Wikipedia article "Introduction to quantum mechanics" stand out for you, or do you have something more recent? (I'm inclined to pick up Feynman's book as I've read his two autobiographies, but its title seems to indicate that is less about particle physics than I'd like.)
As an example of what I'm looking for, though in a different field, I'm currently reading (and enjoying) Immune: A Journey into the Mysterious System that Keeps You Alive by Philipp Dettmer (yes, three p's). Sometimes it's a little less complicated than I like, but I've been looking those more complicated things up.
Can’t find a book like this anywhere! Would really appreciate some guidance! Will award top suggestion!
Hi Does anyone know where i could find these 2 books:
- "adolescents' perceptions of aloneness and loneliness" by Buchholz, Ester S; Roslyn Heights. Vol. 34, Iss. 133
- "The relationships of differential loneliness, intimacy and characterological attributional style to duration of loneliness" by Snodgrass, Mary Ann, Journal of Social behavior and personality; Corte Madera CA. Vol. 2, Iss. 2
I really need them for my final thesis before graduating Social work science. I would appreciate tons ANY advice on where i could find the PDFs for free. There is a website called ProQuest but its only for american students, so if anyone here could check out if they have it, would be a massive life saver! Thanks in advance ^.^
It's been so long that I can really only remember bare minimum things. I believe it was a series of books about two early teenaged siblings, I think a brother and sister, that were usually going on trips with their father but he would get caught in some trap or kidnapped and they had to go find and save him. Or he'd go off on his own and they'd get word and look for him later? I can't quite remember which. I feel like their father was this Indiana Jones kind of dude but his kids were the ones always having to help him out of trouble. I remember one book had them on this jungle like island and I swear there was a part with shrunken heads hanging somewhere. Might have also been a group of island natives that kidnapped the father. I think I read only two books, both involving saving their father from a trap or kidnapping. The covers were hardback and I think were usually realistic and stylized like 80s or 90s style covers.
I read these books in my school library when I was 11 or 12, so that would have been '04 or '05. I've been looking for them for so long that I'm beginning to believe they were just a fever dream.
What’s the name of a book about a girl who is from northern England, has two friends who are more experienced than her and one has an older brother. Each girl is about 14-16 years old. One of the girls names is Holly, she really likes her friend’s brother; I think his name is Tom or Thomas. She wanted to appear older to the brother so she cut her own hair, but it got messed up. The girls took her to the salon and they gave her a short blond haircut. It was written in 2007. The book is white and thick. It’s divided into three sections told by each girls point of view. The cover has each girl next to each other, laying down and they are all wearing different colored striped knee high socks, with their legs up. I read this book when I was 15 years old, ten years ago so 2011-2012. It was at my high’s school’s library in the young adult teen section next to Meg Cabot. I think the author name starts with an M or N, since it was near Meg Cabot’s Princess Diaries series. In the next POV, the girl with the brother’s story is that she pretends to be rich to impress these “posh” guy and his friends, and she isn’t rich. I think one of the girls has curly dark hair and has tan skin. And the third friend is a redhead? I would like to find the title to read it again. I’ve looked everyone and no luck.
Hi! I write interactive Spanish readers!
I wanted to share two of my books. They will be free on Amazon tomorrow (09/17/2021).
I hope you can download it and learn with it!! 😀
I want nothing in return of course but if you like the book please leave a review. That helps me reach more Spanish learners!
Anyway here are the links! Have fun in your adventure!
El inmigrante https://www.amazon.com/dp/B09CVXX3RS
La Reunión Familiarhttps://www.amazon.com/dp/B08K3NRTQ4
Have read the following loosely related but hungry for much more:
The Map that Changed the World
The Lunar Men
Felix Arabia
The Big Score
Barren Lands
The Exploration of the Colorado River
Only Lone Wolf shows up for me, and that's the only one I remember not completing (maybe the Celestial Ball as well?)
I've been an amateur writer for the past 6/7 years and have written several shorts, webserials and the like but never took it seriously. Writing has always played second fiddle to my first love of cooking. However, the pandemic put an end to several years of hard work robbing me of multiple head chef positions as multiple lockdowns hit the UK and businesses went under. As a result, I focused more on writing as a means of making a living. What started as a hobby became a serious pursuit and over the past 18 months, I turned my side projects and incomplete works into a full-time career.
For the first time in my 29 years (30 in a week!), I've completed a story. By that, I don't mean a book, but the protagonist's quest. He started his journey towards exposing humanity's oppresors and make their crimes public last July and finished it last month. This is a major personal accomplishment for me, and to celebrate, I've put the first two books are available for 0.99 on Amazon.
>I was in my garage when the space elves addressed the whole world.
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>They didn't call themselves space elves, of course. Most humans struggled to pronounce Khjurhnalva, so we opted for the easier version. They had a message for us: forces that had eradicated their species' males were now heading for Earth.
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>Hungry for our resources, the alien hordes annihilate everything that stands in their way. The space elves offered us access to the System and asked for very little in return. After all, cooperation was vital to the survival of both our species.
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>I, Mathew Alexander Dunphy, know all of the above is bullshit. I saw the truth with my own eyes and heard it from their beautiful, delicate, deceitful mouths. No one believes me, though. They call me mad.
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>What reason could the space elves have to lie?
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>Planet-wide survival reality show?
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>Ridiculous.
>Apocalypses come with wins and losses. We suffered more of the latter than the former.
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>The first week of Survival Planet claimed two of my dearest friends, but we managed to come away with friend in high places. Our enemies pursued us into a sector with a higher threat level than the last. Biometal behemoths hunt us, and leathery, shock-proof dinosaurs haunt the sky. The future looks bleak but giving up isn’t an o
A lonely orphan hiding underground beneath the city to escape the cyberwar, a young hacker stumbles across a girl in a red dress. She holds secrets that could change the course of history, and secrets about him that could change the course of him.
- It's a short story, I'd like feedback in a week if possible.
- Can do critique swap.
Excerpt A shadow. Jambi squatted in a dark shadow cast along the walls of the underground streets, humming a lost tune to himself. Matthias had nothing for Jambi to repair, so he picked through the litter searching for scraps of food, electronics, or hope. It was the same daily routine, walking the long route through the underground city, forever searching, always alert. He wasn’t the only one; the war left many orphans. His path kept him clear of the gangs of youth, lest he become the focus of their violent ways. A flash of colour in his peripheral vision caught his attention, it stood out from the background of grey walls and the gloomy darkness. A girl wearing a red dress edged with black street dirt watched him from the end of the alley.
Hello, I shared a post on r/Writing and some people suggested I should have some beta readers read a few snippets from my completed novel. This is the first novel I have written. I have written 5 novellas short stories that ranged around 24k each before this so I knew I would able to finish one. I expected this novel to be about 70k words but the story just kept going and it turned into 120k words. I plan to edit the story down in the future after I work another story as I don't want to split the story into 2 stories because this story isn't necessarily fantasy like most people expected. It's about talking animals and more akin to Fox and the hound and Watership Down.
Summary: A Cat named Gabriel moves into a new home and discovers that the neighbors cat is part of a huge group of cats who meet and do activities together like hunting. Gabe soon discovers that they share a secret hobby of befriending prey animals and falsely convince them to be their friends when reality they bring them to the group and then kill them. A cat who can convince and trick a prey animal to be their friend and gain their trust is admirable in their eyes. Gabe tries this himself but finds out that he actually truly befriends the rabbit he tried to false befriend and now must hide their friendship, all the while the truth is hidden from the group and his new friend. Conflict ensues
Snippets from a few chapters: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1cGt57B11VLUQzFWoorRWQ9mmgzDny0c8/view?usp=sharing
Criticisms: Any and all criticism is appreciated. This is my first book I ever wrote so It should be understandable that it will have lots of problems. Doesn't help that I'm beginner, so expect my prose to be trash. I'm terrible at descriptions and dialogue. The only thing I believe I am somewhat competent in is story/plot because as you can see I wrote 120k story on one small idea (Of course the story should revamped to be more coherent which I will do in editing when I get around to it) I plan to write 19 other stories from some ideas I have so I intend to work on the next one while shelve this one for now and possibly rewrite it later with a shorter word count I hope.
Hi everybody!
